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The mutton and the cotton rabbits run automatic

And think a pattern is a problem in the hutch they inhabit.

The huddled masses hush when in the presence of magic,

But then their sense of wonder clashes with their covetous habits.

Carrion carried in talons, caught in the claws.

They must have tarried: they're long in the tooth and short in the jaw.

The passage of passion is too impassably small.

They're forced to fall and pick a corner, cordon off and call it all.

 

We fought to be fickle and now we're quick on the draw.

We put the ripple in water until the fish on the floor.

Death is to order as is disorder to war.

It keeps the predators fed. Have you read the red on the wall?

 

They taught the sheep to slaughter their brothers, born into gutters,

For a quarterage of mortar and brick he bought in the suburbs.

They covet your comeuppance, these upper-crust motherfuckers!

You're sweating for a cent; shedding blood - for a buck - in buckets.

They're seizing all your pieces for peace and it seems it's ceaseless.

Elitists with elongated teeth and prominent features

Are feeding, feasting on the meat of the lamb, and planning meetings

To turn the land to streets, and a tree to a planted seedling.

 

We fought to be fickle and now we're quick on the draw.

We put the ripple in water until the fish on the floor.

We scrawl and we scribble the corpse, nibble and gnaw.

We're born to live but we don't live anymore.

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Line 11, "Death is to order as is disorder to war.", really stands out to me

I think this is deep and gritty

It is well written in my opinion and I can see how it relates to the title

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Aww, thank you much! This piece is very thematic, and putting it together was an intense experience. I had to stop writing altogether for a fortnight after I had finished it so that the tone wouldn't bleed through to my other work. Thank you for reading!
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Aww, thank you much! This piece is very thematic, and putting it together was an intense experience. I had to stop writing altogether for a fortnight after I had finished it so that the tone wouldn't bleed through to my other work. Thank you for reading!

Wow lolz

Well you are very welcome (:

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